冬天的雪三百字:英语四级作文好多分?

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Everone loves the most famous uniersity very much and wants to study in it,
because if you study in it,you willreadily pursue your value in your career.
Should the university campus open to the tourists?Diffent people hold different
views about it.Someone thinks that 'surely',Firstly,there are many many superior students
they can communicate with them,and learn from them,the tourists will absorb the astomphere
in it.Secondly when they travel around the campus, they will take some pictures ,andwhen they
leave from there,they will introduce it to lots of people,they will know the university adequately.
But someone holds the objetive views,they think the university is not identical with the park.when
they travel around the campus,they will interrupt the students study.
In conclusion in my opinion,If I have a good opportunity,I will travel around the campus ,beause
I love and desire them. For example,Beijing university,it is not only a famous university but also
my goal and dream.

应该在9-10-11分左右
文中用到了一些闪光词汇,但还是用得不够准确
象many many这些
并且有些许的语法错误,举个例子
,I will travel around (the) campus ,beause
I love and desire them.
希望楼主有个好的成绩.

study in it, 不好,最好用within it
In conclusion in my opinion很明显是Chiglish!
还有不少不妥帖的地方和语法错误

不过总提上,这篇作文的条理清晰,段落层次分明,逻辑连接也还说的过去.

可以拿满分的 70%,如果改卷老师善良的话

应该在9-10-11分左右
文中用到了一些闪光词汇,但还是用得不够准确