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The distance from us to the Olympic
Time goes so fast. As we know the 29 Olympic will be held in in Beijing. It`s excting. It makes us more proundly and more confident.
Because of this,Beijing has changed a lot. The govenmnent will build many modern things, such as new hotels, an immense stadium and standard swimming pool. And the fantastic modern buildings have been designed by Kurt Conter.
Beijing is more beautiful. I am looking forward to go Beijing and watch the Olympic Games. All of the people want to do so and Everybody will be watching anxiously. My father said, if I can have good marks in every exam. He will take me there in 2008. I am so happy and I must study more hard. And some people also love sports very much and want to join the Olympic Games. It may become true if they practice more and more.
The distance from Shenzhen to Beijing is not too long. It `s only 1000km long. If I can work hard, I will get there in 2008. The distance to some people who want to be a sportsman and join the Olympic Games, it can be far and it can be short, but you shoule to remember“Doing is better than saying.”I believe that the distance from us to the Olympic will be shorter and shorter. Let`us wish,“One World, One Dream. ”

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The distance to the Olympic.
Time goes so fast. As we know, the 29 Olympic will be held in the capital city of Beijing of our country. It`s excting. It makes us feel more pround and confident.
Because of this,Beijing has been changing a lot. The govenmnent has been building many modern things such as new hotels, an immense stadium and standard swimming pool. And the fantastic modern buildings have been designed by Kurt Conter.
Beijing is becoming more and more beautiful. I am looking forward to go Beijing and watch the Olympic Games. All the people want to do so and everyone is watching with eager. My father said, if I could aquire good results in every exam he would take me to Beijing in 2008. I am very happy and I must study harder and harder. Some people also love sports very much and want to join the Olympic Games. It may become true if they practice more and more.
The distance from Shenzhen to Beijing is not too far. It `s only 1000km long. If I study my subjects hard, I will be there in 2008. The distance, for some people who want to be a sportsman and join the Olympic Games, it can be long and it also can be short.
But remember“Doing is better than saying.”I believe that the distance to the Olympic for us will be shorter and shorter. Let`us also wish“One World, One Dream. ”

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