高考问答林枫松陈稳kiss:书面表达.追加100分
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杨老师教我们英语两年了.他虽然很年轻,但上课生动有趣.他关心我们胜过关心自己.如果我们学习上有困难,总能得到他的帮助.有一次他生病住院,还惦记着我们的学习和生活.他真是一位令人尊敬的好老师.
要求:根据要求写一篇短文,单词数为80个左右.不必逐句翻译.
指出楼上的几处错误
一楼 教了两年英语，不代表过去；even though是即使而不是虽然;even if更不可以和but连用，当然though和but也不可以连用;care about sb是喜欢某人而不是关哪橙恕?
二楼 sb is interesting，是表示某人滑稽；关心某人，care是不及物动词；
三楼的我就不说了...
这是我自己写的，可能也有问题，请指教
Mr Yang has taught us English for more than two years.Though he is young, Mr Yang can always make the class full of fun and interest.What is more, he cares for us more than cares for himself. Whenever we get stumbled in study,he is always ready for help.Once he was in hospital for sickness,but he was still thinking about our study and life.Mr Yang is really a respectable teacher.
楼上的错误：
full of fun and interest在这作为宾语补语错误。
than 后面的cares for himself不对，要么补全主语，要么省略cares。
ready for help应该改为ready to help
in hospital for sickness不地道。
更上一层楼的话，错误也不少。：）
Mr（或Miss/Ms)Yang has been teaching us English for two years. Though he is young, his lectures are always interesting and lively.He cares for us more than for himself. Once our English teacher was ill in hospital, but he was still thinking about our study and life.Whenever we have difficulties with our study, he is always ready to help us out. Mr Yang is a truly respectable teacher.
英语忌讳重复。最后再用一次Mr Yang感觉都不一样。这和汉语有很大的差别。
相互指正，共同提高。人无完人......
Our English teacher Yang has taught us for two years. Though he is very young, he has a very interesting and impressive teaching style. He cares us very much. He is always there to help us if we have any difficulties in school. He was concerned with our study even when he was sick in the hospital. He is a excellent teacher and we all like and respect him very much.
Mr Yang taught us English for 2 years now. Even though he is very young, but his class is always very lively. He cares about us more than for himself, if we have any problems with our study, he will always be there to help. Once, he was sick and had to be hospitalised, though, he still thought and worried about our life and study. He is a very honourable teacher
Teacher YANG2 teaches us English two years. Although he is very young, have a class vivid and interesting. He concern we excel to concern the oneself. If we study to have the difficulty up, total can get his help. Have once he gets sick to stay in the hospital, still remembering our study and the life. He is really a good teacher who makes person respect.