沙参玉竹能和山药煲吗:My composition，Who can help me correct the mistake?

A is my home town. It is in the southwest of B,a small village.There are about twelve thousand of people .
My home town is a beautiful place,standing beside a river called C.You can often hear birding (birds)singing there.The sky is bule and the water is clean.
Great changes have taken place in the five past years. {It's important that the 106 national highway across it.}The 106 national highway paved the way for happiness of people's life in my hometown.106国道给家乡人民的幸福铺平了道路 {As the exploitation of the lccal(local people),}And more and more buildings have sprung up. The life of the people is improving. But {still have many people are peasants.}there are still have many peasants.
I love my hometown. {All the time}and I love {its} people there,who are very kind-hearted and lovely. The town is growing steadily. I believe she will be more and more beautiful in the furture.

稍微改了一些地方,仅供参考(去掉括号里面的)
我觉得文章写得挺好,挺有内容,可层次不太清晰
作者最好列个提纲,把结构改一下,使层次更清楚一些

birding->birds
in the five past years->in the past five years
across ->crosses(缺少了谓语动词,cross才是动词)
The life of the people is improving->People's life if improving.
(原句罗嗦)
But still have many people are peasants
->But there are still many peasants.
I love my hometown. All the time I love its people.
->I love my hometown and its people all the time.(精简)
in the furture.->in furture.(在不久的将来用in furture.)

beside--along
But still But still have many people are peasants 中去掉have
写的很好,尤其看出你的语法很好
但还是指出了以上一些小问题
另外我希望你的句子中出现一些连词就更完美了,你的水平已经是个不错的大学生的水平了

birding-bird
across-goes across
have many people are peasants-have many people been peasants

change "birding" to "birds" and "bulea" to "blue"

"But still.......are peasants." it is not a sentence because it without a subject. you can change it to "The life of people are improving, but still.....are peasants."

i love my hometown. all...there" you can change it to "I love my hometown and the people live there."

the last sentence: "i believe she....future". what's mean of "she"? is it means your hometown?

i hope i can help you by this subjection.