cosplay游园惊梦:语法好者进

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刚才的回答都不是很好,有人能在帮帮忙么?谢谢了
A lovely bird
Yesterday,my father found a bird at the bus station and took it to our home.
This bird is very lovely.It has black feather and a yellow bill.But anyone didn’t know what kind of bird is it.
In the evening,my father brought a big box,and put the bird into it.
To our surprise,today’s morning at about half past five,we heard some strange noise.My parents and me all were frighten.We got up quickly and went to the balcony to look for the place which is the noise came from.After a whale,we heard another voice.It said”HELLO,HELLO”
“Oh,it was the bird cry”my father said.
Then we took it to the animal store.The shopkeeper told us that it was a myna.
“Oh,really?”I was very exciting.Beacause this kind of birds are very clever.They can say some easy words and phrases.
I gave it a name that is “little black”I think I will be its friend later on.

took it to our home-> took it home(home作为副词使用,简洁)
feather ->feathers(可数的)
bill->tail(尾巴)
But anyone didn’t know what kind of bird is it. (词句语法错误较多)
But no one knew what kind of bird it is.

today’s morning ->this morning(今天早晨的表达方法)
My parents and me all were frighten
->My parents and i were all frightened.

look for ->have a look at
it was the bird cry->it was the bird who cried

I was very exciting->I was very excited.

I gave it a name that is ->I named it as...

A lovely bird
Yesterday,my father found a bird at the bus station and took it to our home.
This bird is very lovely.It has black feather and a yellow bill.But anyone didn’t know what kind of bird is it.
In the evening,my father brought a big box,and put the bird into it.
To our surprise,today’s morning at about half past five,we heard some strange noise.My parents and me all were frighten.We got up quickly and went to the balcony to look for the place which is the noise came from.After a whale,we heard another voice.It said”HELLO,HELLO”
“Oh,it was the bird cry”my father said.
Then we took it to the animal store.The shopkeeper told us that it was a myna.
“Oh,really?”I was very exciting.Beacause this kind of birds are very clever.They can say some easy words and phrases.
I gave it a name that is “little black”I think I will be its friend later on.

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