高考问答咆哮中文版试听:请各位帮小妹妹看看这篇英文日记有没有语法错误？有的请指出，谢谢！
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September 1st
This morning, I got up early. I went to the Guangzhou Hotel with my parents. We waited for the bus there. At about eight, we travelled to Macau by bus. We got to Macau at twelve. Then we had lunch. We bought a map of Macau. First, we went to the Lotus Flower in Full Bloom. That's one of the famous place in Macau. Then we went to the famous A-Ma Temple. It is a very good place, we took photos there. We also went to the Macau Tower. It is very tall. It's about 338 meters tall. It's the tallest tower in Macau. After that, we went back to the hotel. All of us had fun in Macau today.
这是我第一次写英文日记，我要交给老师过目的，这也是我第一次应用新学的过去式写的文章，不知道有没有其他语法错误，所以请各位大哥哥大姐姐帮忙看看，如果有不对的地方，请指出，好让我再修改。谢谢了！对了，还有，想请各位帮忙打打分，我是个六年级学生，写这篇文章，以我的水平能打几分呢？
我是真的12岁啊……
恩，老师说，我们的程度，写太多字数有点难度，就让我们看到什么写什么就行了，所以可能有点流水帐的感觉，不过也无所谓啦。
那大家有什么可以让文章更出彩的方法？
This morning, I got up early. I went to the Guangzhou Hotel with my parents. We waited for the bus there. At about eight, we travelled to Macau by bus. We got to Macau at twelve. Then we had lunch. We bought a map of Macau. First, we went to the Lotus Flower in Full Bloom. That's one of the famous place in Macau. Then we went to the famous A-Ma Temple. It is a very good place, we took photos there. We also went to the Macau Tower. It is very tall. It's about 338 meters tall. It's the tallest tower in Macau. After that, we went back to the hotel. All of us had fun in Macau today.
这是我第一次写英文日记，我要交给老师过目的，这也是我第一次应用新学的过去式写的文章，不知道有没有其他语法错误，所以请各位大哥哥大姐姐帮忙看看，如果有不对的地方，请指出，好让我再修改。谢谢了！对了，还有，想请各位帮忙打打分，我是个六年级学生，写这篇文章，以我的水平能打几分呢？
我是真的12岁啊……
恩，老师说，我们的程度，写太多字数有点难度，就让我们看到什么写什么就行了，所以可能有点流水帐的感觉，不过也无所谓啦。
那大家有什么可以让文章更出彩的方法？
粗略浏览了一下 没发现什么语法错误～但是。。。这个。。。也太流水帐了吧。。。不过小学6年级的话。。。这个水平还不错。。。另外。。。最后一句话。。。“All of us had fun in Macau today”~~~这句话读起来实在是别扭 这样说应该比较好：What a wonderful day in Macau!~虽然这样说感觉稍微有点不适合前文的风格。。。有点做作。。。
如果你是小学生的话，这篇写的还不错。
小学生能有这个水平，不错。因为你学的东西还不多，想要文章更出彩，嗯，慢慢来吧。。
小学六年级的学生能写出这样的英语作文是很了不起的,什么叫流水帐啊,这叫条理清楚,她才刚刚学习过去式的用法,能写出这种水平来是很不错的,最后一句你帮她改成感叹句固然好,但她可能还没学到呢.小妹妹加油哦.