大学生误入传销事件:请教一个英语写作方面的问题（高分）

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We are pursuing the shines not the shadows
Nowadays, stars are playing important roles in our children’s daily life. Unquestionably, deciding advantages and disadvantages in chasing them seems rather necessary, for not dealing with it properly may influence a man seriously.
Undoubtedly, stars have their own unique shines that would lead people do things in the same way as they do. For instance, the American singer, Jackson, is trying his best to make his funs be aware of the poor. As the song ‘Heal The World’ moves lots of people, pursuing shines from the star are warming us.
However, every coin has two sides as well as chasing stars. First of all, chasing a star who is bad-mannered will surely bring bad qualities in our behavior. That is to say, pursuing shadows are harmful for us. Secondly, chasing them is a waste of time which would influence our studies badly. Let’s say, some of my classmates are the funs of Zhou Jielun, and watching the concert made by him to them is more important than study to them. What’s more, they often listen to the songs when they are in class. Isn’t it a shadow of chasing stars?
All in all, chasing star is acceptable if we are pursuing the shines not the shadows.