韩国跑男嘉宾名单:按课后练习题目写了篇短文，麻烦大家看看，谢谢

Egg’s shape is >The shapes of eggs are
Buying eggs is easy >Eggs is easy to buy.
You can buy it almost anyone super market. >You can buy it in almost every supermarket.
Eggs was cooked is very easy.>Eggs are very easy to cook.
Then you(和前文保持一致） can fire the gas and put a pan on the fire.
in pan 〉in the pan
Wait a minute we put eggs in pan. >After waiting a minute,we can put eggs in the pan.
eggs are finished.>eggs will be cooked well.
Otherwise This egg is unedible.>Otherwise,The eggs must be unedible.
taste> try尝试
I promise you must fell very delicious. 〉I promise you that must be very delicious.
often said.>often says
importance > important adj.
You looked it >as you can see
另：fall in 一般指掉落，所以不合适

第二句，最好用the shape of the egg....因为你文中提到的鸡蛋是没有生命的冬冬，所以要用...of...

第四句，因为要从某处买鸡蛋，所以用buy eggs from/in/at总之要有个介词
而且，anyone是修饰人的，修饰物用any

第五句，应该是Cooking eggs is easy.

点火是：light a fire 这句中的have pan put on fire.应该是put a pan on fire.

英语中的‘这时’不是this time ，而是now.

you should put a bit oil in pan.中缺少冠词，应该是you should put a

bit of oil in the pan
eggs are finished不地道，应该是eggs are cooked

I promise you must fell very delicious.
应该改成：I promise you must think it very delicious.

接下来的The scientist often said.这里一般在often,always,sometimes后的动词是一般现在时，而且，最好用scientist的复数。
所以用 The scientists often say.

下面的内容是科学家们说的，所以，用逗号隔开，（或是在后面接that)而不是独立成句：
The scientists often say,everyone ... /The scientists often say that everyone...
然后，everyday 和 at least 的位置对调一下。

It’s importance, 应该改为It’s important(形容词）

especially to growing up children（尤其对于成长中的孩子而言）
应该是 对于.. for.... grow up 是长成的，所以要去掉up.

汉语中的‘你看’不是you look it.是you see.

最后一句最好改为Eggs are good enough to have them everyday.

如果是液体的话，常用的是；pour in
但如果是固体的话，put in 是OK的。fall in 没有这种用法^_^

fall in 的用法主要有2种：
1掉入....中，
2塌陷(垮下,集合,到期)

1比如说，fall in love 坠入爱河 fall in river掉入河中
2比如，
She fell in with my idea at once.
她立即同意了我的意见.

我试着帮你改了一下,用PUT IN可以,FALL IN不行,FALL IN可以用在FALL IN LOVE的时候.
Yeah! I like eggs.
Egg’s shape is ellipse and color is yellow. [THE SHAPE OF EGGS IS ELLIPSE AND THE COLOR IS YELLOW]

Buying eggs is easy. You can buy it almost anyone super market. [YOU CAN BUY IT ALMOST IN ANY SUPER MARKET]

Eggs was cooked is very easy.[EGGS IS VERY EASY TO COOK.]你不能用两个BE 动词.
You only need to break it up into a bowl without shell. Then we can fire (我想说点火) and have pan put on fire.这句我不知道你要说什么,你可以说成[THEN YOU CAN PREPARE THE FIRE]

Ok, this time you should put a bit oil in pan.[NOW YOU SHOULD PUT A LITTLE BIT OIL IN IT]
Wait a minute we put eggs in pan. After 5 minutes, eggs are finished.[EGGS WERE DONE] Oh!!! I forget to say,[I FORGOT TO SAY]
you must put a little slat and shallot in pan, Otherwise This egg is unedible. Haw-haw, In China It was called hebaodan(荷包蛋).
Yeah, that is very great[THAT WOULD BE GREAT]. If you don’t believe, you can taste it yourself. I promise you must fell very delicious. [I PROMISE,YOU WILL SAY IT'S VERY DELICIOUS]

The scientist often said. Everyone had better eat an egg everyday at least. It’s importance,[IT IS IMPORTANT ]

especially to growing up children. 把TO 改成FOR

You looked it. Eggs are too good to not have it everyday.
如果是第一次写还算不错吧

I like eggs.

Egg has shape of oval and its color is yellow.

Eggs are commodity food, can be bought almost every where.

Eggs are easy to cook. You only need to break the egg shell, then put eggs onto an oiled pan, and heat the pan on a cooker. After 5 minutes, eggs will be cooked. You must put a little slat and shallot in the pan too, otherwise it is unateable. In China it is called Hebaodan(荷包蛋).

That was very easy. If you don’t believe it, you can try it yourself. You will say it is very delicious.

Scientists often said. An egg everyday, especially to growing up children.

Eggs are too good to miss.

我其实是按照你的文章重新一边，可以作参考。以下是你英语里的错误。

Yeah, 非正式用语，多为口语
通常不用Ellipse，用Oval
buy it almost anyone ， 缺少From
点火通常说light sth. 比如light the fire
must fell, must 后一定是现在式，应该是feel才对
you looked it 应该说you see
unedible 应该是 unateable 吧
believe 后边应该跟it,him,her 之类的
荷包蛋 英文应该是 fried egg

写得很不错啦!还请别人改正,很有前途,很有前途!一定要继续努力哦!~~~不过问题还是不少的...楼上的都讲得差不多了.还是教你几个写作技巧吧.

1.过程要用步骤词来标识,使文章清晰有条理.比如:first,second,third,这对于初学者很重要.写好句子的问题以后可以解决.
2.英语句子和中文句子的"重心"是不同的,中文里说买鸡蛋很方便,重在说方便,而英语中就要说"It is easy to buy eggs."把重点放前面.因此英语中有很多种句型都是为重心服务的.
3.可以试试用长句子.
5.注:建议不要用文曲星了.
所以,我想把你的文章改成这个样子.
I like fried egg (我爱荷包蛋,这个中心使文章中心突出). it is very easy !First,you should break it up into a bowl without eggshell.Second, put a pan on fire and then put a little oil in it.When the oil is hot enough ,you 'd better put the egg into the pan . Five minutes later ,it is finished .Oh! I forget to say, you must put a little salt and some curtal shallot in it, otherwise it will be (没发生) unedible. Haw-haw, It is called hebaodan in China (荷包蛋).
It tastes great! If you don’t believe, you can taste it by yourself. I promise that it is very delicious . It said that(the scientist often say that) everyone had better eat an egg everyday at least. It’s important especially for growing children.
You see, Eggs are too great to miss it everyday.
小改动就能变成地道的文章.
还有,waichinglee写得很出色,可以当作范文体会.